Please take a minute to read this. I need to answer all holes in my argument. If there is any concern that is needed to be answered, I would really enjoy constructive critisim. Anything I need to answer, add, get rid of, etc. This is for my English class, for a MAJOR grade. All of the help I can get is greatly appreciated.
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As we all know, everyone has had many different life experiences that make us unique. These experiences have the potential to shape our physical appearances and personalities in strange ways. Fortunately, many of you have not had to experience the divorce of your own parents. /Yet./ For the few of you have, you will know where I am coming from. For those who haven’t, please bear with me, and keep in the back of your mind, that this can happen to anyone./
Deanne grew up an only child in Las Vegas. She was a pretty girl, blonde hair, blue eyes, smart. In high school, she met a man who was five years older than herself. Allen was handsome and worked as a detective for the city. A beautiful young woman meets this dashing fellow. How could her life get any better? It was a perfect love story. Deanne took Allen to prom her senior year and, she wore an elegant, turquoise dress. Of course, prom night should be great. She was spending it with the man she loved. Not long after she graduated, they got married. They were so perfect for each other…/or so they thought.\ After two or three years, Deanne didn’t feel the same about Allen as she once did. Marriage wasn’t as sugar-coated as she, as well as many young girls and women, may have once thought. They got a divorce. \Unfortunately, Allen’s story didn’t have a happy ending. Allen committed suicide a few months later. /During the next year, she met another man named John. Deanne knew she couldn’t make the same mistake again. This was different. She was already out of high school, with a job. She loved this man! It was meant to be. So, they got married after only a few months of dating. Over the next few years, Deanne and John had two boys, Thomas and Ben. By the time Thomas was six and Ben was four, their parents’ relationship was falling apart. John was working all of the time, and Deanne always stayed home with her children. A year later, Deanne told her boys / that their father wasn’t coming home. The decision for a divorce was made final, child support discussed, child custody schedule set. All of their possessions were cut in half, including the time with their children. The boys stayed with their mother one week, their father the next. Thomas wasn’t able to handle the split and required counseling for his emotions. John was heartbroken. But Deanne knew she had to move on./It didn’t take her long to find someone else. Ronnie had two boys of his own. Deanne knew she had made two previous mistakes. This had to be real. It just had to. Wedding bells ringing at the church only /six /months /later…
Now here’s the real story: (Diagram)
Nevada = GeorgiaThomas = HeatherBen = My little sister
Deanne is my mom. Allen is dead. My own dad’s heart torn to shreds. My old life gone.//
Marriage is the right thing for the right reason, but marriage can also be the wrong thing if it’s for the wrong reason. Same for divorce. Did you know that one out of every two people in the U.S. gets a divorce? That’s a lot. Why do we accept such a thing in this country? While it is impractical to outlaw divorce entirely, we can’t allow this to happen again and again. So this is what I propose. A time penalty should be put on divorce. The standard time penalty for a divorce will be five years, starting from the official court date of the divorce until the official date of the next marriage. For anyone above age 60, the penalty would go down to a standard of three years, due to the shortened years of life. The judge for anyone’s divorce case can decide to lower, raise, or even erase this penalty if he/she thinks necessary, depending on the case. I understand that everyone makes mistakes, but I’m not saying that divorce is always bad. But as a whole, this new law is for the greater good of society. Think about all of the celebrities today who get married. Do their relationships ever last? Rarely. Celebrities can’t escape this law, either. Britney Spear’s first marriage with Jason Alexander only lasted fifty-five hours. That is ridiculous. This is another example of why the commitment of marriage should not be taken so lightly. We want people to get married in this country, but for the right reasons. This law is very reasonable compared to other countries, such as Saudi Arabia or Iraq, where the penalty for divorce is death.
If one out of every two people in the U.S. gets a divorce, then that means that half of our country consists of people who have reneged on their promises. If you decide to go to college, then you most likely will have to take out a loan. Now, the bank trusts you to keep your word to pay them back on a timely ma
manner. If you go too long without paying a cent back, do you think the bank will ever trust you again?
Allowing divorce so freely is showing people in our country that it is OK to make promises that you can’t keep./ It isn’t. /The bank is not going to spare you any mercy, especially when they’ve already given you infinite chances to keep your promise. And you can’t forget about the consequences that come with that promise being broken. Foreclosure on your home, all of your possessions taken away from you, or even bankruptcy. /Of course, none of us have always been true to all of our promises. But where marriage is concerned, we need to be honest to the person we dedicate our entire lives to. /And most of all, we need to be honest to ourselves./ Do I really love this person? Is this who I really want to spend the rest of my entire life with? If we have any doubt for either of these two questions, we should wait. People make mistakes, but recognizing the mistake early on only makes
that’s doing the right thing for the reason.
Some of you may say, “This is too strict,” or “I’m afraid to get married under these new rules.” I’m not saying that people shouldn’t get married, but people should get married for the right reason. This penalty would only make us wiser in our decisions. If there was a chocolate bar in a convenience store, and there was no law enforcement to stop you, would you steal it? If you had a gun in your hand, and you didn’t have morals, would you even kill someone? If we don’t have laws, society is free to do anything. We currently have laws concerning divorce, but those laws don’t have the same power of this law. Those laws don’t have the same consequences. This law is better for us. This argument is not just about the present. I understand how difficult it is to stop someone from divorcing their spouse once a couple realizes they have made a mistake. But this is
truly about the future. Our hope for a better future, and our hope for a better
People make mistakes, but recognizing the mistake early on only makes life easier.//
Sex is also an important part of any marriage. It is also something that many people tend to do out of marriage. These are people who don’t really care about the person they are having sex with; they just want the satisfaction they get from sex. If sex is the only reason why some couples get married, then the marriage will not last long. Sometimes women in these types of relationships get pregnant, and they usually get married, too. These are pointless relationships will result in short marriages that will happen again and again if people are allowed to do so. My law helps these pointless marriages from happening. Marriage is a commitment, not a one-night stand. I’m not encouraging promiscuity, but if people are not willing to make the commitment to love one person, there is no point in getting married. If someone can keep a solid relationship with one person for five years, that’s doing the right
Some of you may say, “This is too strict,” or “I’m afraid to get married under these new rules.” I’m not saying that people shouldn’t get married, but people should get married for the right reason. This penalty would only make us wiser in our decisions. If there was a chocolate bar in a convenience store, and there was no law enforcement to stop you, would you steal it? If you had a gun in your hand, and you didn’t have morals, would you even kill someone? If we don’t have laws, society is free to do anything. We currently have laws concerning divorce, but those laws don’t have the same power of this law. Those laws don’t have the same consequences. This law is better for us. This argument is not just about the present. I understand how difficult it is to stop someone from divorcing their spouse once a couple realizes they have made a mistake. But this is
truly about the future. Our hope for a better future, and our hope for a better generation. My mom was willing to give up a colle
college education to marry the man she thought she loved. She never went to college, and she is suffering for her mistakes now. Marriage is meant to last. And if it doesn’t last, it doesn’t make us bad people. But we must learn from our mistakes. If someone had told my mom, “Hey, don’t marry the first person you come to,” her life might have been different. Simply, don’t rush things that don’t have to be rushed. We have our entire lives to do what we want. I want us to make the best decision when the time is right.
After a divorce, 5 years of a no-marriage ban is put in place.
Every time I look at my ring there is this sense of joy, safety, and the reassurance that everything will be okay.